Showing posts with label writing help. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing help. Show all posts

Saturday, June 28, 2014

Writing help: Finding my way back

I’ve reached a place in my writing where I’ve become complacent, especially when it comes to revisions. I need some discipline, maybe a kick in the butt to get myself back on track. I’m not sure how this happened. Maybe I have become uninspired when it comes to rewrites. What frustrates me is I can read through an unknown manuscript and easily find what needs to be fixed, but when it comes to my own writing, I’m blind. Something needs to be done to find my mojo again and get me out of this writing funk. I wonder if other writers experience this at some point.

I thought back to when I first started writing and how excited I was to get those words down and get them right without worrying about how I did it. Maybe it’s inspiration I need in order to find my way again—inspiration and some discipline when it comes to revising my work.

Discipline I can manage. So, how do I get that elusive inspiration back that I need? That’s the million-dollar question. This is almost as bad as writer’s block. One thing I noticed is I worry too much about breaking the writing rules now, and I think that fear is holding me back. When I was a newbie writer, I didn’t worry about the rules because I didn’t know all of them yet. I think some of my earlier writing is also my best, or at least, more unfettered than it has been lately. To be creative, I think you need to let go and not worry about rules too much. Yeah, I know. I just said I need to be unfettered and have some discipline—contradicting meanings. Surely, I’m crazy. Possibly. But, what I mean is there needs to be a balance of letting go of the rules and having some discipline during the revising process. I can’t just casually read through my manuscript. I need to go through it line by line and have a list of things I need to look at. This is where knowing my weaknesses can be useful. My editor helped me with that one. Smile

So, how do I find the inspiration to write and revise my book to make it the best it can be? I need to let go of my hesitation, my fear of breaking a rule. I need to let the words flow naturally. That and a little kick in the butt of discipline might just help me get back what I lost.

 

Kelley Heckart, Historical fantasy romance author

Captivating...Sensual...Otherworldly

http://www.kelleyheckart.com

http://kelleysrealm.blogspot.com/

http://twitter.com/CelticChick

http://www.facebook.com/pages/Kelley-Heckart/111838455604

Daughter_of_Night

Two mortals are caught in the midst of the battle between the Titans and Olympian gods.

http://kelleyheckart.com/daughter_of_night.html

Friday, February 28, 2014

Self-editing

Anyone that thinks writing is easy and fun doesn’t have a clue what it really takes to complete a novel. Sure, anyone can write a first draft and send it out without bothering to self-edit or hire an editor, but it’s not going to be very good or error free. Writing isn’t easy and doing self-edits isn’t fun.

I’m in the process of finishing 3 books, all part of the same series. It has been a long, tedious process, especially all the rounds of self-editing I’ve had to do. I am close to finished. Yay. I don’t know if there is an easier way to self-edit, but I do it in layers. This takes longer but gets the job done. The main things I am looking for when I go through one of my stories is overused words or phrases because that’s my bad habit. I’m also filling in details, characters and story details--what I call the “frosting” to my “book cake.” This is where I am looking for plot holes or any inconsistencies. I’m making sure the opening has a hook, that the story flows to that dark moment and final climax.

It’s a lot to look for so I have to do several rounds of self-edits. I’m done when I can read through the story and not have to fix anything or only have to fix a small amount. And once I’m finished with the self-edits, I’m going to have a professional proofreader look it over. Authors should never do final edits on their stories. Never. We are too close to our work to find all the typos. Final edits are the edits done before publishing. I can self-edit well enough to have a clean manuscript to submit to a publisher. Some authors might need to have their stories edited before submitting to a publisher. You have to know your weaknesses. I have been writing for a long time and know what I can and cannot get away with doing.

Some of the things I see in manuscripts as an editor are overused crutch words like when, as, once, that, with, etc. “When and “as” usually appear in passive sentences or sentences where the reaction comes before the action. One thing I’ve noticed is that every author, no matter how talented they are, always have at least one bad habit. That’s why it’s important to use at least a proofreader for typos and grammar. They will also catch most of the things like overused words and passive voice. An editor will look for the same things as a proofreader plus things like plot holes and flow problems.

 

Kelley Heckart, Historical fantasy romance author

Captivating...Sensual...Otherworldly

http://www.kelleyheckart.com

http://kelleysrealm.blogspot.com/

http://twitter.com/CelticChick

http://www.facebook.com/pages/Kelley-Heckart/111838455604

Daughter_of_Night

Two mortals are caught in the midst of the battle between the Titans and Olympian gods.

http://kelleyheckart.com/daughter_of_night.html

Friday, May 10, 2013

My Five Favorite Writer's Helper Sites Around the Web

Hey y'all. Hope some gorgeous spring weather is upon you. We've had some thunderstorms and far too many cold snaps, but this week, we're living the good life.

I thought today I'd let you in on some of my favorite help sites for writing in case you're feeling uninspired. I know a few people who've mentioned they're not motivated or stuck in their WIPs. Here we go (I tend to repeat myself without remembering, so if you've seen some of these links from me before, don't remind me unless it gets excessive. It's all about my self-confidence. *wink, wink*):

1) Chaotic Shiny - A) it has one of my favorite words in it. I love shiny stuff. B) It has generators to help propel your writing. Need names, places, descriptions, events? Chaotic shiny has it. My first novel, The Treasure Hunter's Lady, was the plot product of a random story generator. God bless the people who put those things together.

2) Behindthename.com - It has long, long lists of names from literary to historical. I've picked tons of names from this site, either by searching for the name and its variations or by meaning. I don't think I could live without this site. It's the mother of all baby name web spots.

3) Cracked.com - Okay, it can be vulgar, and they make fun of a lot of things, from history to politics to the animal kingdom. But I also learn all kinds of things from this site. It not only points fingers and blurs the reality you know, it teaches. Who could ask for more?

This photo has nothing to do with this
post. That's the beauty of it.
4) Stock xchng - I know, it's a weird looking title for a website. And what does the stock market have to do with writing? Well, your guess is as good as mine. This isn't about money. Although you can find dollar sign photos here. For free. For your blogs. I love this site because I've pulled all sorts of goodies for blog posts from it. It makes my life easier because I don't have trot around the world searching for an approproate (or inappropriate) photo.

5) Pinterest - You knew that was coming, huh? What I love about it is that I can make super-sneaky private boards. And it fuels my obsession with steampunk fascinators and hats. And I can upload graphics and media I use to market my books. I have a whole board full of quotes from them. Or you can see everything I've pinned from motivational quotes to Victorian photography. Yes, it's a time suck, but it's a deliciously wonderful one.

Feel free to share your favorite time suck, er helpful writer-friendly sites with me!

When I'm not blogging here, I'm at Have Novel, Will Edit, Facebook, Twitter, and Google Plus!

Sunday, January 15, 2012

My (final) G.R.I.P.E. (Great Indie Pub Experiment)

Last year, I announced that I was going to take the plunge and, along with my husband, try out the new trend toward independent publishing--and that I'd post our results here for all to see.

As a reminder, here were the goals I'd set in my last post:

PREVIOUS PROJECTED GOALS (for Sep/Oct/Nov 2011)
Total available titles: 12
Total hours spent per week (writing not included): 5
Total sales projected: 500


A bold, but not crazy step up from my first-quarter goal of 6 titles available and a mere 30 copies sold for 40 hours work per week. Since my actual numbers wound up being better than this, happily, I adjusted the above projection accordingly.

So what happened? Did I make the goal?

Here are the results from September through November:

ACTUAL TOTALS
Total available titles: 28
Total hours spent (per week) on promotion/learning curve/production: 20
Total sales: 3,770


Well! Quite a lot more available titles than we'd planned. My husband and I buckled down and did more writing than anticipated the first two months of the quarter (and then took a break in November). However, this also meant a greater time requirement for production--four times as much. However, the return was seven times greater than projected, so overall we were still ahead.

Not too shabby for our little experiment, I'd say. I will mention that December saw our sales drop(ironically when holiday shopping is at its annual high), which we highly suspect was due to our November hiatus (no new content for a month). Still, we were quite pleased with the numbers overall, which have tallied close to 6k since we began.

With 2011 behind us, the official "Experiment" is over, and we have declared it a success. My husband is doing indie work exclusively and has largely stopped other business ventures in order to focus on it. I will still be writing for my publishers, but will keep doing indie stories as well.

I wouldn't have guessed this when I first started our experiment, but with the way our coming year's schedule has evolved, I've conceded that this must be my last post here at Nocturnal Nights. Sadly, some shuffling of time commitments was in order to keep the train rolling. I've truly enjoyed my time here and hope you all found some helpful (or, at least, entertaining!) info within my posts.

Happy 2012, and Happy Writing to all of you!

Sunday, May 15, 2011

My Gr.I.P.E. (Great Indie Pub Experiment)

Yes, good things still come in threes, and I’m starting an all-new series that will appear on this blog in three parts during 2011. They just won’t appear back to back.

After a variety of publishing experiences ranging from awful to awesome, the joy of saying “I told you so” to folks who told me that e-pub would never amount to anything, and years of “don’t go there” conditioning, I’ve decided to take my career in a direction I never dreamed I would.

I’m going indie. And I’m going to post the results right here for all to see.

Am I so dissatisfied with my writing career that I feel forced into self pub? Not in the least! In fact, my earnings have grown exponentially each quarter for the past year. So why take the plunge into the dark, scary world of indie?

I have a lengthy list of reasons for giving it a shot, but to wrap it up in one word, I’m interested in the POTENTIAL. The potential for books I’d back-burnered to see the light of day. The potential to control cover art and sales prices of my work completely—and to change them when I want to drive sales. The potential to pocket a much larger percentage of profits than even my generous publisher offers. The potential to get in on what is being likened to the California Gold Rush while the gettin’s still good.

So, I’ve decided to experiment with this idea and see where it takes me. Am I giving up on other publishing? Nope. In fact, I just started a 7-book series for my current pub, and have another book under consideration elsewhere. I’m merely seeking ways to expand my prospects.

Every quarter, in between each new three-part series, I will post the latest stats and info on how things are working with this experiment. My expectation is that things will start off very slowly, then build over time. My hope is to start seeing a modest, yet steady income from this enterprise within a year or so, and that posting about my journey will help some of you who might be considering this road.

Okay! Here are my starting point stats and goals for the next quarter:

Currently distributing on: Kindle, B&N, Smashwords

Titles currently out: 1.
(An erotic short-short story written by my husband, who agreed to be my first guinea pig!)

Days available: 3

Total sales: 1 (A copy sold on Smashwords the first day, which surprised me. I heard that it takes time to get sales, and that they are far more likely to happen on Amazon than other distribs.)

Goals:
Total available by next quarter: 6
Total hours spent (per week) on promotion, learning curve, production: 40
Total sales projected: 30


Whoa! Hold the phone. Why on earth would I want to dive in with paltry projections like these? Patience, grasshopper. Patience. For one thing, at least two of the projected titles will be short stories, which don’t tend to sell as well as novels. However, they DO sell, and can later be bundled into a collection or offered free to entice readers. I’m also projecting low because of the expectation that it takes time to get things rolling, especially since these titles will be released under a number of different pen names (since I write different genres and will also continue putting out my husband’s work). Once I’ve got a substantial catalog of full-length work and bundled shorts, things should get far more interesting. Sales projections will rise each quarter, while hours spent on promotion/learning curve will fall. This is based on what I’ve heard from authors like JA Konrath and Selena Kitt who are making a good run at indie pub.

So wish me luck! And yes of course, you knew this was coming...I just have to give that first experimental indie title a plug here!

PRIVATE PARKING by Michael Jade
An erotic short story

As Annette heads for her car after a late night’s work, the last thing on her mind is the first thing she’s going to get.

When Annette’s longtime friend, Teddy, texts her about an unsatisfying date, mild “sext” flirting quickly gives way to a hot photo session right in the front seat of her parked car. But is she alone in the private parking garage?

Kindle version
Smashwords
B&N/Nook

Tuesday, April 26, 2011

In The Zone with Zee: Of Editors and Your Story...

Hey beautiful people

26th of the month again, and I'm back on Tabby's Nocturnal Nights for the monthly Agony Zee advice column.

I received two queries this past month that pretty much overlapped, and I figured I'd answer them both here since I'd tell them the same thing. Both queries pertained to editors and editing.

Now, I'm still a freelance editor, and in the past I've been a senior editor at an epublisher. My duties covered every step of the acquisition and editing process, from reading submissions, writing broad notes identifying the problems with the ms (if problems were too substantial, said broad notes constituted the feedback for the rejection letter. If the work was taken on, broad notes were the very first phase of edits). I would then go on through technicalities of the story and ms, line by line edits, galley formatting and proofing. In these last stages, I'd also help the author come up with tag lines and back cover blurb.

So this answer, and basically this column, come from the POV of an editor. If ever there's any question you wanted to ask an editor but never dared to (or didn't know who to ask!), feel free to send me a query at zeemonodee@hotmail.com and I'll try my best to feature your query and the answer here.

Without any further ado, here are the questions for today:

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Dear Agony Zee


I guess you must be aware more and more authors are jumping on the self-publishing band wagon. After considering the pros and cons, I've decided to jump aboard the train too.
My problem is that most places I check for advice, and even the self-pubbed authors say this, recommend that any author going indie acquire the services of an editor before putting the work out.


The thing is, I have received extensive critiques on my ms, and I have a good eye for my own mistakes and pitfalls.


What will an editor help with? If I knew what more an editor could bring to the table, I'd be willing to consider the option. Care to enlighten me?


Signed,


Going Indie

AND

Dear Agony Zee


I recently signed with a small epublisher and am now awaiting to be assigned an editor. The acquisitions' person has already told me there would be work expected from me on this ms, that it will require a lot of tweaking to bring it to publishable standard.


As excited as I am to have signed, I'm dreading this edit process. Could you tell me how far and how deep an editor can go into the editting process? How anal should s/he be?


If I know what to expect, I wouldn't find this perspective so daunting. Please advise.


Signed,


Dread in my Stomach

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Dear Going Indie and Dread in my Stomach,

To answer Dread's second question (how anal should an editor be?), I would say as anal as possible!

To Indie and Dread, here's what an editor is supposed to do/be.
The job of an editor is to fine tune your story and to make the ms as strong as possible. The editor also needs to give the pub house the best possible work for publication.

So, in concrete terms, what does this entail?

In broad sweeps, this is what is expected of an editor:

- Know the craft


- Know the genre


- Know the story being editted inside out


- Know the market

Knowing the craft means that an editor should know how to write too. The editor needs the same basis as the writer, because a story, whether writing it or editting it, uses the same techniques. How will an editor be able to spot GMC issues or plot holes and plot drops if she doesn't even know what these are about? An editor also needs to come up with constructive advice and avenues for every issue she finds in your story, whether it is how to make the hero more heroic or how to activate your scenes and make them more character-forward. And, of course, the editor knows about all those terms such as character forward, massaging the story, layering, and knows how to explain it to the author in a clear way.

Knowing the genre means an editor should be in her element when working on a story. For example, if the editor is a fan of vampires and weres, she knows the rules, limitations and set-up of such creatures' worlds. This enables her to edit a story within these worlds to make it stronger.
Now in case the editor is not so familiar with a genre, and however lands with the story, it is her job to brush up her knowledge of the genre in order to be able to provide a worthy edit. Say that for example, your editor has landed your Regency historical but is not inherently familiar with that era. She'll be expected (by the publisher and Editor-in-chief first) to brush up her knowledge. Ideally this story should go to someone who is familiar with the era and genre, but this is not always possible. Research is a key word here. Then the editor won't come and ask you in her notes why in a Regency historical, you mention that women don't wear heavy powder and rouge yet the old gossipmonger of the town wears it. As your Regency historical editor, she should know that powder and rouge went out at the turn of the century, yet the older ladies who did wear such makeup prior to the era circa 1800 still stick to their guns and haven't ditched the heavy caking up.
Another example would be a fantasy story - an editor should recognize that fantasy stories are rather heavy concept-wise and contain lots of explanations because the world is completely fabricated, with its own myths, landscape and world-building.

Knowing the story inside out means the editor should be able to sit down and talk about the intricacies of the story off the top of her head. She's expected to have read, re-read, and analysed every aspect of the story so that she knows its every detail on the tip of her fingers. Expect at least a modicum of 'knowing what the story is about' and everything the plot and characters entail from your editor.

Knowing the market means your editor has also got her finger on the pulse of the publishing world. What's hot and what's not, what's in and what's out, what's being requested and what being ditched faster than a hot potato. This knowledge will enable your editor to tell you why your story may not fare well and what you can do to remedy that. For example, if beta heroes are being brushed aside and you have a Beta hero in your ms, the editor can, will, and should, tell you this and offer ways how to Alpha-ize the hero to better target the market.

All of the above usually come with the editor when she takes the job, or at the very least, when she is training to become an editor. The actual hands-on side of the task of editting englobes all the above and combines a few other aspects, discussed below. These are more the nitty-gritty, on the job/ms issues:

Ensuring a proper reading experience - an editor is the bridge between the author and the reader. The editor has a duty towards the reader to provide him/her with the best possible reading experience where the book is concerned. So in this light, an editor must ensure that the story has a smooth flow, that it 'works' well, that it is a wholesome package, and also that it doesn't take the reader for an idiot.

Guaranteeing attention to detail - this comes in the wake of ensuring a proper reading experience. The editor makes sure that details are consistent throughout and make sense all through the story. A good example would be character and place names - are these consistent in the ms? Could there be an instance where the hero, who is named Nick, is addressed/mentioned as Rick? Nothing jars a reader more than lousy attention to detail. Imagine reading a story where the hero is named Michael and at one point, you read line that goes "She thought him obnoxious? Viktor didn't know what to make of her!" This wouldn't be a problem if the hero was named Viktor, but say that in the first draft he was named Viktor then the author changed it to Michael. Not only did the author miss this name slip, but the editor too missed it? On more than one read? Wouldn't this spell 'sloppy' in your reader's mind?

Being the guardian of language - another point to consider: people read also to 'see' how proper language is used. As such, an editor is the guardian of the language, because based on her edits, people can and will construe the grammar/spelling/punctuation laws. For example, he had strived. First, strived does not exist, and second, after using had before a verb, you would use striven. An editor's best friends are often a style guide and a good dictionary!

Yet, all this does not mean the editor is responsible for all the aspects of your story. She isn't a full-time nanny with whom you dump your baby once you've delivered. The editor should fine-tune your work, but she isn't responsible for the whole deal of making your ms meet quality standards. You as the author are expected to do a good part of this already when you submit your work.

Some examples of this would be:

Proofing your work - your editor is not your school teacher. Every writing program has a spellcheck feature; use it and present a good, finished project. A few instances where the program may have missed an error is not an issue, but when the ms is lettered with mistakes, the editor can be saying "Holy ****!" at every page and this doesn't bode well at all for a good edit!

Needing to rely on the author for some things - like formatting according to the publisher's submission guidelines. Another good example would be when the editor is not familiar with an aspect of the story and has to rely on the author knowing what he/she is doing. Like, your story is set in Northern England, and the old ladies there call everyone ducks, or Scots call a baby a bairn, or your London East End cabbie says Guv instead of Sir. The author has to make sure such details are accurate. Similarly, if the author needs, for example, permission to use the lyrics of a song, he/she is responsible for ensuring he/she is not in breach of copyright laws on said lyrics. The editor is not responsible to figure out if you're in breach (though she should question it and ask for proof of release) and does not need to go search for this release on the author's behalf.

Research work -the editor cannot research the story's background/era/backing for the author. An example would be depicting the animosity between a Hindu and a Muslim in India. An editor is not expected to know the intricacies of this animosity, its roots and reasons for existence. This seems to contradict what I said above, that the editor should be familiar with the era. There's a difference between being familiar with an era/period/situation and knowing the intricacies of a region. For example, as an editor you should know the base notes about the former IRA in Ireland and how it affected the country and people. However the editor is not expected to know that such and such word carries bad connotations and is never used. This is research that the author needs to undertake and which the author should be able to explain. If the editor knows it, great, if not, the author should help by providing the most accurate and up-to-date presentation in his/her work.

No rewrite expected - an editor shouldn't be saddled with a sloppy copy of your ms, or the first, non-revised draft you ever penned (a publisher shouldn't even take on those, but sadly, this isn't the rule at all houses). The editor is expected to fine-tune your story, not rewrite it to commendable standards! The author needs to provide a good foundation on which the editor can continue building.

No tampering with your voice - a good editor will recognise your voice for what and how it is and will not ask you to overhaul it. There's a difference between ensuring proper grammar in your work (your characters use verbs like people talk, like, there ain't any way she did that. This can work in dialogue, but not outside of dialogue tags.) Your voice means the way you write, the words you use, the way you explain things. If your style of writing goes into using a few sentences to describe a setting and the description works, your editor shouldn't tell you, tighten this to a five-word sentence, or you are overwritten, or, you use too many questions) All these can pose issues if they do happen too much, but a good editor should know how to figure out the difference.
For example, your heroine has been kidnapped and once in the cold, dank and dark room, her POV goes:

Why me? What do they want from me? A ransom? No one has the kind of money to pay for my release. Why, oh why, did I think of going to the store when the light outside was broken?

Counter example: your heroine loved a man who went missing and she is now about to marry his brother:

Oh dear! Would she be able to marry John tomorrow? And why was she thinking of Steve, when she was about to pledge herself to his brother? Steve. Had she ever stopped loving him? And what to make of the suspicions she had that the man she'd seen lurking around could be him? They had never found Steve's body, had they? That charred skeleton in the car could've been anyone's, couldn't it? What would she do if Steve came back? Would she go ahead and marry John? Would she betray John's love? What would she do? Would John blame her? Was Steve still alive? Would he come back from the dead?

The point here - unless you're writing the script for a soapie, the second example has too many questions, while in the first, the questions actually strengthen the POV and highlight the heroine's plight.

So with all this in mind, how does the editor actually go about the job? The key here is reading. Yet, there are different kinds of reading associated with editting:

Read like a potential reader - This is usually the first read. Is story interesting? Does it make sense? Is it consistent? At the same time, the editor is asking herself whether this story would fit in the editorial line-up of her house. Usually, to a trained editor, the first 40-50 pages give a pretty good idea of what the story will be about - whether in plot or technical aspects. S/he can spot if the story is already strong or expects it to falter along the way.

Read like a editor - Usually second read, though a seasoned, experienced editor can do this on the first read itself. At this stage, she is looking for the potential pitfalls of the story, which issues need to be adressed, such as plot holes, plot drops, incoherent characterization, sketchy GMC.

Read like a 'teacher' - usually follows in the wake of the 'looking for issues' read. The 'mistakes' are identified and solutions devised based on the story, plot, characters, etc. The editor here jots down how to strengthen the story, irrespective of whether plot holes or the likes were found in the ms.

Read like a reader - after line-by-line edits are tackled, to make sure the details are consistent and whether the story provides the best possible reading experience. Example - Nick became Rick or Michael turned into Viktor are dealt with here.

That would be the broad view of it. Every story is unique, and also based on the complexity of the story and the length, all of the above can take place within two weeks or two months, provided too that the editor is working exclusively on that project. If she's also got other works on her edits roll, this can take longer.
It is pretty much obvious an editor would encourage rewrites to stregthen the story, but at the same time, she shouldn't be overhauling your story either, unless this is exactly what you signed up for when you were contracted. For example, you sold on proposal and your first draft made it on the editor's desk, and she takes the role of CP-beta reader-editor in the same go.

There you go, the long and short of it. An editor generally should be anal and a perfectionist, because that's when she ensures the best possible story comes out of your hands, through the publisher's doors, and into the hands of the readers.

And, the best bit - the reader knows naught of what the editor did. The great work coming out is the author's, and it's the author who reaps all the glory and spotlight!!

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Got a question for Agony Zee? Drop her a line at zeemonodee@hotmail.com with your concern/issue/dilemma.


Zee Monodee
Author of stories about love, life, relationships... in a melting-pot of cultures
Zee is an author who grew up on a fence - on one side there was modernity and the global world, on the other there was culture and traditions. Putting up with the culture for half of her life, one day she decided she'd stand tall on her wall and dip toes every now and then into both sides of her non-conventional upbringing.
From this resolution spanned a world of adaptation and learning to live on said wall. The realization also came that many other young women of the world were on their own fence.
This particular position became her favourite when she decided to pursue her lifelong dream of writing - her heroines all sit 'on a fence', whether cultural or societal, in today's world or in times past.

Hailing from the multicultural island of Mauritius, Zee has been writing for close to a decade and has had 3 novels published so far (under other pen names). After a stint in the publishing industry, on the 'other side of the fence' as an editor, her goal today is to pen wholesome, fulfilling stories and help fellow authors, whether as critique partner or as freelance editor.

Find out more about her by checking her blog

Saturday, February 26, 2011

In the Zone with Zee: Of Plots...

Hey beautiful people

26th of the month again, and I'm back on Tabby's Nocturnal Nights for the monthly Agony Zee advice column. I received a very peculiar question this month, one that got me thinking once I got over my 'horror'. Yes, this query mentions something horrible, to be absolutely prohibited in the world of writing. What is it? Read on for today's column:

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Dear Agony Z,


I have been fiddling with a plot for a while now and I’m stuck while at two-thirds of the way.


I am not finding any good way to finish the story with this plot, and instead of ditching it completely, I have found a way to salvage it.


I am simply going to add in a new plot to take me through the remaining third.


Can you please advise as to how to merge the two plots seamlessly?


Signed,


Lost in plot

*****

Dear Lost in plot,

Please, please, please – STOP right there!

Do not, I repeat, do not, merge plots together!

One of the worst mistakes a writer can make is to go – oh, let me just add a plot here to perk it up.

Just like makeup only hides the flaw and doesn’t address the real issue, you too will not be addressing the issue and will simply aim to mask it.

A plot is something that should be carried through from start to end. If it isn’t working, there is a problem with your plotting, and adding in a new plot will only double your trouble as you’ll be doing the same thing with the second plot.

There is no masking of a plot, only working it.

Understand the concept first. Analyze your own story. Find avenues to address your problems. Play the 'what if' game, and think about what could happen in your story if...
Stuck in a corner? Turn around, look at the one-way street in which you got blocked, and walk back. Get to the entryway of this road, and from here look before you and shoot tangents - imagine you're in a white world with no perspective: shoot 5-6 tangents from there and see where they lead you to.

Every plot had a logical ending. Distance yourself from the work, and look at the global picture of this plot - where does it start, and where does it end? Work this as a layer over your story, to get to the resolution of your own original plot.

Then consider how to resolve your pending story. Adding in a new plot is not a solution.

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Got a question for Agony Zee? Drop her a line at zeemonodee@hotmail.com with your concern/issue/dilemma.

Zee Monodee
Author of stories about love, life, relationships... in a melting-pot of cultures

Zee is an author who grew up on a fence - on one side there was modernity and the global world, on the other there was culture and traditions. Putting up with the culture for half of her life, one day she decided she'd stand tall on her wall and dip toes every now and then into both sides of her non-conventional upbringing.
From this resolution spanned a world of adaptation and learning to live on said wall. The realization also came that many other young women of the world were on their own fence.
This particular position became her favourite when she decided to pursue her lifelong dream of writing - her heroines all sit 'on a fence', whether cultural or societal, in today's world or in times past.

Hailing from the multicultural island of Mauritius, Zee has been writing for close to a decade and has had 3 novels published so far (under other pen names). After a stint in the publishing industry, on the 'other side of the fence' as an editor, her goal today is to pen wholesome, fulfilling stories and help fellow authors, whether as critique partner or as freelance editor.

Find out more about her by checking her blog

Wednesday, January 26, 2011

In the Zone with Zee: The Original Dilemma: Show, not Tell!!

Hey beautiful people

26th of the month, and I'm back on Tabby's Nocturnal Nights for the monthly Agony Zee advice column. Usually, I feature 2 queries sent in by writers with 'issues & dilemmas', but today I'll have only one topic up. Why? Because it is a quintessential aspect of writing, made even more resonant in the field of writing romance. You guessed it - how to show and not tell in your story.

On this note, here's today's column:

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Dear Agony Z


I keep being urged to “show, not tell” by my crit partners. They say what I give isn’t enough, but I don’t understand, since I do give descriptions and explanations. Can you please enlighten me here?


Signed — The one who doesn’t get it.

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Dear I-don’t-get-it,

“Show, not tell” is probably the first line you heard when you joined this career. It is probably the most passed-around piece of advice in writing. It doesn’t really get better with time either though, sometimes droning into a sort of litany you get fed up with.

However, there has hardly been most precious advice in writing. In essence, it is what writing is all about. Anyone can string a few sentences together to give an account of a happening. The author, though, goes further, bringing life to this episode. How? By “showing” and not “telling.”

Let’s go to the roots of this statement. “Show” v/s “tell”. What does it imply? Let’s take an example.

The sky was a clear, powdery blue, and the brilliant sun hung like a golden orb in its vast expanse, bathing the world below with bright rays that could blind the eyes when it reflected off water.

It was summer.

Both of these sentences say the same thing, but which one held more appeal? Anyone can tell you it is summer, but what can you as a writer provide your reader with what summer is like? While the first sentence “shows”, the second merely “tells”.
This can also work into planting the setting and giving your reader a feel of where the story takes place. Your story can take place in summer in England. Good. But where in England? Summer as seen in London is very different from summer as seen in the country. Another example could be what summer is like in a dry area like Las Vegas and summer in a humid place like Miami.

“Show, don’t tell” can deepen your story too, and present your writing voice, as well as your character’s mindset. Take the following statement:

He was as sinful as chocolate.

You can use this to describe your hero, but frankly, any woman can tell you a man is as sinful as chocolate. What does the woman you’re writing about, your heroine, think? Say you have two women vying for the same man. Both can describe him as in the above statement, but do you think this would ring true? How about giving your reader more? This can be done by “showing” them what each thinks of the bloke in question, without simply “telling” what he is like.

One woman can say – he was as sinful as chocolate. Like a Mars bar. All hard and dark on the surface, but take a bite and you get to the heart of him, where he was soft and sweet, with just the right amount of sugar merging with the melting bitterness of the dark cocoa coating that held him as the whole he was.

The other woman could say – he was as sinful as chocolate. Almost like extra rich, 70% cocoa extra dark Lindt slabs. Polished and so smooth on the surface, with a crispiness that remained even after you’d taken a bite. It didn’t end even when the delectable concoction started to melt on your tongue, when you got that potent rush of bitterness that stung the taste buds, making you crave more even as you wince. And then the hint of sugar kicked in, soothing and bringing bliss disproportionate to the sharpness that had just invaded your senses. That’s what he was like, an addiction she loathed yet one which she always gave in to when he overcame all her defenses.

In the above paragraphs, you take the same sentence and expand on it, bringing a uniqueness to the story, to your voice, to each character. It can wrap your reader in a world where they hang on to your every word, where they get lost in the meanders of your pen.

How do you do this? By “showing, not telling.”

Now, let's say you need to describe something - bed sheets. Different people will 'feel' the sheet in different ways.

Look at the following examples, and see how many different women are portrayed through one single description:

Like a soft summer breeze drifting along her skin...

The sensation of smooth white sand trailing along her fingers, reminiscent of a the drifting grains inside an hourglass...

Like the skin of a man after showering off the exertion of exercise, smooth, cool, yet with a hint of lingering warmth that permeated all the senses...

Now let's use something else - a brand. What, and how, can you show with a brand?

Many will say dropping the brand name itself in your work is enough to show, like this:

She was dressed in a Chanel suit. – This shows she has money.

But like with chocolate above, you have this superb springboard to use to bring uniqueness to your work, to immerse the reader even more into the story and characterization.

Look at these examples using the Chanel suit:

She was dressed in a Chanel suit, the tweed, lapelled jacket reminiscent of the first creations of Coco Chanel.
– This shows that the suit is old. Either she clings to old stuff (Miss Havisham-like), or the suit can be an old discard she bought in a second-hand store.

She was dressed in a Chanel suit, the tweed, lapelled jacket reminiscent of the first creations of Coco Chanel, except for the bright, vibrant colours of the fabric and its crease-free treatment which left the lapels crisp even after long, drudging day.
– This shows a brand-new suit, as the crease-free treatment is a new concept and the colours a trend of recent seasons. She has money and uses it to regularly update her wardrobe. She is fashion conscious and consequently, can be thought to be a sophisticated, cosmopolitan woman.

She was dressed in a Chanel suit, the bright colour of the fabric competing with the sparkle of the Swarovski crystals and the blinding gleam of the platinum jewellery at her throat, ears, wrists and fingers. The bling factor was echoed in her strappy silver sandals and the chunky, heavy metal chain on her custom-made, lizard-skin Birkin. An Hermes scarf trailed out of the bag’s opening, the pure silk showing ladders in its weave where the delicate fabric had caught on the gigantic Tiffany diamond ring on her left hand
– This paragraph shows you a woman who has money and loves to flaunt it. However, the fact that she combines so many brands and is so much a show-off highlights that she may be new money or trying hard to show that she has the moolah. She is also a fashion victim, which can suppose a neurotic personality and a ruthless one at that too. Or, it can show a woman who is not self-assured at all and wants to fit in desperately, but awkward and trying too hard, manages to compromise all her chances.

A few details here have helped to present a different picture at every single example. Yet, we started with the same woman and the same suit.

You 'show', and it's this 'showing' that 'tells' your reader what you want to convey.

There you are - 'show, not tell'. I'd love to hear your comments, and if this article was helpful.

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Got a question for Agony Zee? Drop her a line at zeemonodee@hotmail.com with your concern/issue/dilemma.

Zee Monodee
Author of stories about love, life, relationships... in a melting-pot of cultures

Zee is an author who grew up on a fence - on one side there was modernity and the global world, on the other there was culture and traditions. Putting up with the culture for half of her life, one day she decided she'd stand tall on her wall and dip toes every now and then into both sides of her non-conventional upbringing.
From this resolution spanned a world of adaptation and learning to live on said wall. The realization also came that many other young women of the world were on their own fence.
This particular position became her favourite when she decided to pursue her lifelong dream of writing - her heroines all sit 'on a fence', whether cultural or societal, in today's world or in times past.

Hailing from the multicultural island of Mauritius, Zee has been writing for close to a decade and has had 3 novels published so far (under other pen names). After a stint in the publishing industry, on the 'other side of the fence' as an editor, her goal today is to pen wholesome, fulfilling stories and help fellow authors, whether as critique partner or as freelance editor.

Find out more about her by checking her blog

Sunday, December 26, 2010

In the Zone with Zee: Of Men and Heroes...

Ever had a writing dilemma and wondered where you could take it to get some advice? Ever wondered why there isn't an 'Agony Aunt' of the writing business?

Well, look no further, because Agony Zee is now here to answer your questions!

Every 26 of the month, Agony Zee will be dropping by Tabby's Nocturnal Nights to attend to questions, queries, and other related writing/publishing dilemma faced by the 'common of mortal writers'.

So on this note, here's today's column:

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Dear Agony Zee


My husband is threatening to divorce me if I don’t cut down on my writing. Writing is my life. What am I to do?


Signed – Desperate wife

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Dear Desperate wife,

Your husband doesn’t understand that writing is your life? Turn the tables on him – see if he can live without the Sports Channel and that six-pack of beer in the fridge. Would be good to give him a dose of his own medicine, don’t you think? Cut the TV cable, and dump the beer in the toilet. Serves him right!

Frankly though, that’s not the way to go about it, though it would bring instant gratification.

When we become writers, writing, and this exhilaration of putting words and stories down, provides us with the same high as a junkie’s fix. We come to depend on it, thrive on it, crave it almost always. Very much akin to an addiction.
We’ve all heard of the ‘strange’ symptoms to be wary of when someone close to us is getting dependent on drugs. Don’t make the mistake to think writing cannot take over your life like drug addiction would. In a way, it’s even worse, since you’re not doing anything illegal.

Put yourself in your husband’s shoes – when you make writing your life, what becomes of him? Relegated to the sidelines? Dumped like trash? Forgotten like a bad memory? Erased like a misspelled word?

When you’re thinking about this wonderful hero you’re creating, at the joy and love he’ll bring to your heroine, take a minute to pause and ask yourself whether you’re not as worthy as this heroine too. Don’t you deserve to be loved and cherished? Of course you do! One advantage you have over her – you already have your hero, and that’s your husband.

Fictional relationships and fulfillment don’t bring us personal satisfaction in our hearts, the part that needs human touch and human love to thrive. Recognize this and let your husband give it to you. You’ll only lose otherwise.

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Dear Agony Zee,


My hero refuses to come out of the box. What am I to do?


Signed, Frustrated with men.

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Dear Frustrated with men,

There is nothing more annoying than a man who refuses to bend to our ways, even worse when he happens to be the hero we are creating.

So, he’s in a box, and doesn’t want to come out. What can we suggest for you?
Tempt him, tease him, tantalize him. Lure him with Oreo cookies. Leave a pack of beer by his box, and snatch him when he comes out for the treat. Poke a hole in his box, at eye level, and then walk outside the dreaded cube wearing sexy lingerie.

Another option – drop him. Have your heroine take a look around her. Maybe there’s this cute neighbor/colleague/delivery guy who has the hots for her, but whom she doesn’t notice. Get her to open her eyes, and take good stock of what surrounds her.
This in turn, can make your reluctant hero wake up from his warp zone and see what he may be missing on.

On the real note though, when your hero refuses to come out of the box, something is wrong in your approach as a writer. A hero is a vital component of any romance, and one that isn’t working should be revised.
Another thing to remember – characters shouldn’t work for you. You as the writer work for them. You tell their story. You relate how they tackle life and its ups and downs. You paint their take on the world. Not the other way round, as many seem to believe.

A reluctant hero? Find out what makes him reluctant. Maybe the heroine is not his type of girl. What would it take to get him to consider her as a possible love interest? Poke, prod, dig into his psyche, and then use this to up your conflict and plot.

Use every avenue to exploit the possible interaction between him and your heroine.

And sometimes, the unsuspecting guy you have lurking in the sidelines is your real hero. Try giving him a chance too if the ‘obvious’ man is being too pig-headed.

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Got a question for Agony Zee? Drop her a line at zeemonodee@hotmail.com with your concern/issue/dilemma.

Zee Monodee
Author of stories about love, life, relationships... in a melting-pot of cultures

Zee is an author who grew up on a fence - on one side there was modernity and the global world, on the other there was culture and traditions. Putting up with the culture for half of her life, one day she decided she'd stand tall on her wall and dip toes every now and then into both sides of her non-conventional upbringing.
From this resolution spanned a world of adaptation and learning to live on said wall. The realization also came that many other young women of the world were on their own fence.
This particular position became her favourite when she decided to pursue her lifelong dream of writing - her heroines all sit 'on a fence', whether cultural or societal, in today's world or in times past.

Hailing from the multicultural island of Mauritius, Zee has been writing for close to a decade and has had 3 novels published so far (under other pen names). After a stint in the publishing industry, on the 'other side of the fence' as an editor, her goal today is to pen wholesome, fulfilling stories and help fellow authors, whether as critique partner or as freelance editor.

Find out more about her by checking her blog

Tuesday, September 28, 2010

Frugal Writing






"Axe unnecessary words and tighten your work."
Huh? What does that mean? Well, according to Stephen King, he uses this formula:
A good second draft = the first draft, less ten percent.
Growing up, my mother's best friend was the epitome of frugality. She could split a dollar ten different ways and still have change left over.
Here's an example, and I kid you not:
Auntie would buy two-ply toilet paper and rip the sheets off at four square intervals. Usually while watching evening TV, she would separate the two-ply into piles. Then fold the now one-ply, and stack them in an empty tissue box with the top cut off. She'd put this box of precut TP near the toilet (no spinning rolls in that house!) to make the experience more convenient for the…partaker.
How can we apply this to editing and have the completed results not change the flow, the plot, the very writing itself? Thus, the Stephen King formula.
If you're like me, you tighten the sentences and realize you're losing a huge amount of work. The word count drops, and nobody wants loss. But the revision is good! Bright, tight, and condensed. Your crit partners are doing some type of Tahitian bootie shake in your rewrite honor!
What have I done when this happens? I add a few new scenes if my edited version comes out too short.
My parent's trashcan never filled to the rim. They recycled before recycling was ever thought chic. And I bet they can still out-trash anybody out there.
  • Planning the garden on a hand-drawn chart, we grew our own vegetables like a writer creates a storyline. The seeds took consideration. The rows planned out. Space and water, as with characters and tension, were important factors as the plants matured, growing ready for harvest
  • My parents' cupboard had limited amounts of pre-packaged food; just like a writer should come to the keyboard with fresh ideas. Nothing someone else already created.
  • Left over banana peels, bones, potato skin, etc., either fed our chickens, horses, cows, cats, and dogs, or contributed to the compost pile. Nothing, and I repeat, nothing was ever wasted. As writers we create whole chapters which are sometimes cut in the editing process. I save all those pages to possibly use later. Maybe to apply after "tightening" and I need to increase the word count again.
  • Tin cans, plastic packaging, cardboard--all the 'good waste' went into the recycling bag. Used envelopes, junk mail, and old calendar pages became scratch paper.
Many things in daily life can be repurposed. I'm not talking about crap lying around your house, I mean life in general. Don't waste your down time while pushing a cart around the grocery store. Drink in the sights, smells, sounds, and variety of people.
Look in their carts! (You'll never see them again, what do you care?) Note what they wear. Some of my best tension ideas come from watching people in the check-out line or filling up at the gas station.
Being frugal doesn't mean you have to be cheap. Quality will out shine nominal every time and last throughout the ages. A superior life will be remembered as fulfilling. Excellence in writing is timeless.
Let me know how you apply frugality to your writing. What's your tightening process, and do how you feel about the end result?